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Pain in my heart [[H2SO4]]

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1 Pain in my heart [[H2SO4]] on Sun Apr 11, 2010 11:26 am

Dijano Vires

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yo,wassup fellas,check this track from our crew H2SO4,Pain in my heart,its a love track,hope u guys will like it..Peace.
Please let us know if there is any problem in this track and give us your feedback.

http://www.4shared.com/audio/BQvlikuE/Pain_in_my_heart.html

Lyrics:

yeah this is H2so4 Adi...Dijano...here we go...

[[Dijano]] (Chorus)...

baby just hug me kiss me hold me tight,
come close dont go spend the night,
always stay by my side,
every single day and night,
baby just tease me miss me say my name,
remember love is not a game,
i hav changed i am not the same,
the whole world thinks that my love is lame,

[[Adi]]

on this day,
i am here to say,
everything,
in every way,
i hav been rhyming all these time,
you hav been cursing me all the time,
but i still love you baby,
one day i will come maybe,
with roses on my hand and chocolate on my pocket,
and take you to moon with me on a rocket,
make a home for us there,
and let the whole world stare,
write our name on moons lair,
let them know coz we dont care,
you dont know how much i miss you,
you dont know how much i love you,
i want you,
i need you,
i cant live,
without you,
i know that i have decieved you,
i know that i have hurt you,
but baby please forgive me,
come back and never leave me,
i promise i will never leave you,
every moment will stay beside you,
with so much depression in my mind,
i smile when i think of holding you from behind,
maybe that's the reason why i am still here,
i am still waiting for you,cause i do care,
forgive me for i have made you cry many time,
with all my deep emotions i'm now ending this rhyme.

[[Dijano]] (Chorus)...

baby just hug me kiss me hold me tight,
come close dont go spend the night,
always stay by my side,
every single day and night,
baby just tease me miss me say my name,
remember love is not a game,
i hav changed i am not the same,
the whole world thinks that my love is lame,

[[Dijano]]

when i close my eyes i see your face,
two ear rings and a diamond lace,
blacks tops blue jeans high heal shoes,
two silver braclets ring on the nose,
silky hairs glowing white cheeks,
lips as red as solid bricks,
words are short to describe your beauty,
to keep you happy from now is my duty,
i will never make you fall or make you cry,
no matter what i hav to do i will give my best try,
it was my fault that we seperated,
dont know why i was so desperated,
even now after so long,you are driving me crazy,
everything now making me feel bored and lazy,
don't know why but your presence makes me feel good,
you're the one in this world that can change my mood,

[[Dijano]] (Chorus)...

baby just hug me kiss me hold me tight,
come close dont go spend the night,
always stay by my side,
every single day and night,
baby just tease me miss me say my name,
remember love is not a game,
i hav changed i am not the same,
the whole world thinks that my love is lame,

this song is dedicated to all the true lovers,
around the whole world,hope you liked it...



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2 Re: Pain in my heart [[H2SO4]] on Sun Apr 11, 2010 1:08 pm

AKProductions


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where did u get the beat? i love the beat.

about your music...umm...please spend some time on this site (read through the sticky topics on every sections) and read comments ppl leave on other ppl's threads..i guess u guys r new to hiphop...do the homework next time a real track (this track is full of problem). good luck.

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3 Re: Pain in my heart [[H2SO4]] on Sun Apr 11, 2010 1:30 pm

Adi

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we got the beat from sm website, btw tnx for ur comments and suggestions,but it will be better if u tell us where the problems are so we keep our eye on it next time.Peace..



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4 Re: Pain in my heart [[H2SO4]] on Sun Apr 11, 2010 1:36 pm

AKProductions


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i dont wanna insult u guys..but to be frank..the song had issues from the very second i heard the vocals. it got too many issues to focus on any one..but jst do what i told before..it'll help u..trust me. GL.

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5 Re: Pain in my heart [[H2SO4]] on Sun Apr 11, 2010 6:29 pm

Dijano Vires

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ok bhaia bujjchi,ebar khich kha !!!!



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6 Re: Pain in my heart [[H2SO4]] on Sat Apr 17, 2010 8:36 pm

Adi

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http://www.4shared.com/audio/BQvlikuE/Pain_in_my_heart.html

fresh version of the song,check this out, and tell us if there is any problem in it @AKProductions ... Peace. Smile



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7 Re: Pain in my heart [[H2SO4]] on Sat Apr 17, 2010 8:42 pm

Demonic

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link nt valid...Sad

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8 Re: Pain in my heart [[H2SO4]] on Sat Apr 17, 2010 9:12 pm

Adi

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http://www.4shared.com/audio/BQvlikuE/Pain_in_my_heart.html

its working bro o.O



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9 Re: Pain in my heart [[H2SO4]] on Sat Apr 17, 2010 11:36 pm

Demonic

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gud fo a 1st try. nxt tym try harder bro...

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10 Re: Pain in my heart [[H2SO4]] on Sun Apr 18, 2010 12:23 am

Dijano Vires

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ty,we will try our best Smile



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11 Re: Pain in my heart [[H2SO4]] on Sun Apr 18, 2010 2:41 am

Adi

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Thenx bro =]



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12 Re: Pain in my heart [[H2SO4]] on Sun Apr 18, 2010 3:02 am

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What made you guys think of naming a crew "sulfuric acid"?its new and interesting.I'll look on the track later on


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13 Re: Pain in my heart [[H2SO4]] on Sun Apr 18, 2010 3:17 am

Dijano Vires

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H2SO4 stands for Hardcore Huslerz ,Syndicate of four Smile

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14 Re: Pain in my heart [[H2SO4]] on Sun Apr 18, 2010 7:13 am

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I'm providin this feedback since "adi" pm'd me for feedbacks.

So basically beat selection and topic wz gud.
The hooks need to be catchy ...hooks are offtune.
The verses need better delivery. There should have been more energy...and should have been louder...
Pronounciation needs work...
Lyrics should have been deep for this kind of a topic...

for a 1st try i wudn say it's bad... keep at it... work hard. peace.

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15 Re: Pain in my heart [[H2SO4]] on Sun Apr 18, 2010 7:22 am

Adi

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owk thenx for ur feedbak =]



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16 Re: Pain in my heart [[H2SO4]] on Sun Apr 18, 2010 5:48 pm

Dijano Vires

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@TheRiddler ty for ur feedback,we will try to be louder next time... Smile

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17 Re: Pain in my heart [[H2SO4]] on Sun Apr 18, 2010 8:59 pm

Jeexo aka Motka Mama

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dint feel dis shit, hooks totally out of tune, rap out of beat all thru out!! lyrics too childish, not good mxiing!! i think u guys can do betta!! den agen ami onek kothai bhabi !! no offense, proove me wrong =]

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18 Re: Pain in my heart [[H2SO4]] on Sun Apr 18, 2010 10:28 pm

Wafi

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No offense but first get better and then start promoting your stuffs...I think that even if you get a lot of audiance with all that fancy pictures and stuff people will get unsatisfied of your products and in future songs even if you guys deliver something good really good and professional people will be reluctant to check out your stuff...whatever practice and get better ....I'm not a big fish in this game or something and I'm not sayin that I'm better then you guys...i just pointed out my vew...that's all...

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19 Re: Pain in my heart [[H2SO4]] on Mon Apr 19, 2010 1:48 am

Dijano Vires

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@ Jeexo & Wafi : hmmm ty for ur views,we will try to do sm better shit next time,no offence bt don think we need to prove ny1 wrong..nd yeah the mixin was not gud,its our 1st track,so we had to face lots of problem while doin it,we will look after it in the future..peace Smile

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20 Re: Pain in my heart [[H2SO4]] on Mon Apr 19, 2010 1:52 am

Wafi

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hahahahahah....just on word...lol....hahahahah....now I have a question where the heck did you guys get the beat couse it has the same intro that says "sono a pezzi" at the start of the beat which was the one that a old frien of mine back in Italy always used in his beat production...I just had a deja-vu when I played the song for the first time...

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21 Re: Pain in my heart [[H2SO4]] on Mon Apr 19, 2010 2:37 am

Dijano Vires

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i have checked the beat..i didnt hear ny sono a pezzi,i guess u confused "yeah this is h2so4..adi..dijano.." with sono a pezzi..i got the beat frm a website.. Smile

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22 Re: Pain in my heart [[H2SO4]] on Mon Apr 19, 2010 3:37 am

Wafi

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damnit this web site is messy becouse that comment was reffered to another topic lol....and in the very same time I clikked send you to did the same thing and your comment was sent on the mokta mamar gaan while mine have been sent here..now that\'s really lol....that feed was reffered to the mokta mamar gaan...



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23 Re: Pain in my heart [[H2SO4]] on Mon Apr 19, 2010 3:39 am

Adi

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thenx evey1 for the feedbak, n jeexo u know i respect u for being such a gud rapper n i respect ur views n i will prove u wrong dude dont worry.



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24 Re: Pain in my heart [[H2SO4]] on Thu Apr 22, 2010 7:09 pm

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Ai8 i aint gonna hursh at ya peep ... bt yeah it cud've been bettah... U do also knw dat ....cuz so far i knw u guyz got potential ...Bt YeAH as diz is ya'r 1st Try So i thinK ya'll b able 2 figure out ya'r lackness...Ai8 so keep on reppin Bd ...BesT oF LuCK ..Fo ya'r Future ProjeCtZ..
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25 Re: Pain in my heart [[H2SO4]] on Thu Apr 22, 2010 8:24 pm

mc shanz

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damn this beat is awesome...

hook-offtune.
verse 1-rapper need to improve his spittin alot !
verse 2 - "when i close my eyes i see your face,
two ear rings and a diamond
lace,
blacks tops blue jeans high heal shoes,
two silver braclets
ring on the nose,
silky hairs glowing white cheeks,
lips as red as
solid bricks" this lines can turned into catchy 1 if the flow was different i think so !

mixin-was not good !

cause this is your 1st track so doesn't matter,keep practicin it will help you to improve ! best of luck (Y)

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